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Mvskoke
Hero
Join date : 2012-12-17
Posts : 370
Age : 37
Nickname : Mvskoke
Character Sheets
Element: Wind
Limit Breaks: Aeroblivion / Whirlwind Whip / Quad Tornado
| Subject: fantasy story off topic  Thu Feb 28, 2013 4:59 pm | |
| This is where you tell me how great my story is and how brilliant a writer I am. | |
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Cibryll
Forum Princess
Custom User Title : The Aeonian Twilight Join date : 2012-12-03
Posts : 1784
Age : 28
Nickname : Charlie
Character Sheets
Element: Ice
Limit Breaks: Frozen Tears / Ice Needle / Chill Mist
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Thu Feb 28, 2013 5:36 pm | |
| It's pretty good, the first part. | |
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Chonk
Fifth Elemental Prince
Custom User Title : Potatolord of the potatoes Join date : 2012-12-21
Posts : 1041
Age : 22
Nickname : Chonk
Character Sheets
Element: Data
Limit Breaks: Silk Viper / Spears of Fabric / Cloth Monster Strike
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Fri Mar 01, 2013 3:39 am | |
| Not bad, could be better but still good | |
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Mvskoke
Hero
Join date : 2012-12-17
Posts : 370
Age : 37
Nickname : Mvskoke
Character Sheets
Element: Wind
Limit Breaks: Aeroblivion / Whirlwind Whip / Quad Tornado
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Fri Mar 01, 2013 4:54 pm | |
| Well duh it could be better, everything could be better.
Specific criticisms?
A new chapter is out! Things actually start to happen and th main character appears | |
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Cibryll
Forum Princess
Custom User Title : The Aeonian Twilight Join date : 2012-12-03
Posts : 1784
Age : 28
Nickname : Charlie
Character Sheets
Element: Ice
Limit Breaks: Frozen Tears / Ice Needle / Chill Mist
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Sun Mar 24, 2013 12:06 am | |
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Mvskoke
Hero
Join date : 2012-12-17
Posts : 370
Age : 37
Nickname : Mvskoke
Character Sheets
Element: Wind
Limit Breaks: Aeroblivion / Whirlwind Whip / Quad Tornado
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Sun Mar 24, 2013 1:38 am | |
| Thanks! I've got some more done, but its mostly fallen to the side now. With the comic and stuff. I'll finish up the latest chapter soon then.
I kind of felt like no one read it, with the lack of feedback | |
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Chonk
Fifth Elemental Prince
Custom User Title : Potatolord of the potatoes Join date : 2012-12-21
Posts : 1041
Age : 22
Nickname : Chonk
Character Sheets
Element: Data
Limit Breaks: Silk Viper / Spears of Fabric / Cloth Monster Strike
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Sun Mar 24, 2013 4:06 am | |
| Well Chapter 2 was interesting. I love Elves.
Feedback:
-Minor Grammar mistakes but doesn't take away from the story
-Nice Word Choice, it had a lot of voice
and finally........
THE AWESOME ELF! | |
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Mvskoke
Hero
Join date : 2012-12-17
Posts : 370
Age : 37
Nickname : Mvskoke
Character Sheets
Element: Wind
Limit Breaks: Aeroblivion / Whirlwind Whip / Quad Tornado
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Sun Mar 24, 2013 4:15 am | |
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Cibryll
Forum Princess
Custom User Title : The Aeonian Twilight Join date : 2012-12-03
Posts : 1784
Age : 28
Nickname : Charlie
Character Sheets
Element: Ice
Limit Breaks: Frozen Tears / Ice Needle / Chill Mist
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Sun Mar 24, 2013 11:35 am | |
| Between what happened on 3 March and yesterday... I kinda forgot to read this ^_^"
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Cosette
Hero
Custom User Title : Iris Heart ~ Plutia Join date : 2013-02-26
Posts : 713
Age : 27
Nickname : The Eternal Oblivion EX, Cos
Character Sheets
Element: Poison
Limit Breaks: Toxic Flower / Toxic Sun / Poison Gas Explosion
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Tue Mar 26, 2013 10:43 am | |
| It's great~  We should have a story where everybody gets a chance to post a chapter!  | |
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KarjamP
Moderator of Kindness
Join date : 2012-12-16
Posts : 1478
Age : 29
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Element: Heart
Limit Breaks: Rejuvenating Heart / No More Caring / Power of Heart
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:08 am | |
| Uh, I can't draw.  | |
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Cosette
Hero
Custom User Title : Iris Heart ~ Plutia Join date : 2013-02-26
Posts : 713
Age : 27
Nickname : The Eternal Oblivion EX, Cos
Character Sheets
Element: Poison
Limit Breaks: Toxic Flower / Toxic Sun / Poison Gas Explosion
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:20 am | |
| You're talking about the comic  This thread isn't for the comic, it's for this  . | |
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KarjamP
Moderator of Kindness
Join date : 2012-12-16
Posts : 1478
Age : 29
Character Sheets
Element: Heart
Limit Breaks: Rejuvenating Heart / No More Caring / Power of Heart
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:52 am | |
| Mistakes can happen.  | |
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Mvskoke
Hero
Join date : 2012-12-17
Posts : 370
Age : 37
Nickname : Mvskoke
Character Sheets
Element: Wind
Limit Breaks: Aeroblivion / Whirlwind Whip / Quad Tornado
| | Subject: Re: fantasy story off topic Tue Mar 26, 2013 3:13 pm | |
| Anyways, that's a good idea Kim. I'll start one | |
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